ourchair
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I swear, that goat said she was 18!!compound said:Yup! I also wanted to see just how much had been archived. You'll realize why very soon
Much of comedy lies in the pacing. So it is with Bendis' dialogue parody. Especially when lampooning his rants.compound said:Edit it? [a beat] Edit it? Dude, you take this waaaay too seriously.
You needed more word balloons. And less 'we people put up with your ****' and more 'you are a jerkwad'. It's not about the people being in a higher moral position but about the antagonist being spoken to and his self-righteousness.
Also the ending was too dismissive. You need to go with the whole, "Why pick on me? Why me?! WHHHHYYYYY?!?!?!?!?!" and some variation of "All I'm trying to do is... (get by/give something back/do what my father wanted)"