Bass
Nexus of the World
Found the whole thing amateurish.
By the way, if you go here, the 'sample' lesson mentions poor dialogue, and particularly explains why repetition is foolish. Read that, then go back and look at Bendis' dialogue in just this issue. Ben and Sue's scene has repetition. As does Jessica and the scientists.
Bendis just repeats and repeats.
But it goes deeper than that.
Look at the story of the issue. The actual plot.
It is the same beat, repeated four times. Big pink explosion. Big pink explosion. Big pink explosion. Big pink explosion.
Four times.
So the first explosion is shocking. By the time you've got to the fourth, the explosions are predictable, and boring, and 'safe'. The precise opposite of their intent.
By the way, if you go here, the 'sample' lesson mentions poor dialogue, and particularly explains why repetition is foolish. Read that, then go back and look at Bendis' dialogue in just this issue. Ben and Sue's scene has repetition. As does Jessica and the scientists.
Bendis just repeats and repeats.
But it goes deeper than that.
Look at the story of the issue. The actual plot.
It is the same beat, repeated four times. Big pink explosion. Big pink explosion. Big pink explosion. Big pink explosion.
Four times.
So the first explosion is shocking. By the time you've got to the fourth, the explosions are predictable, and boring, and 'safe'. The precise opposite of their intent.
